I agree with Damian about the kick. Wrong one for that style.
It might be me, but is there a new note introduced to the chord at 5 mins 33 seconds? Could be used much earlier to introduce some variety. If I'm right, it's very subtle, but subtle things is what this style is about.
Definitely needs more work to build a strong structure, but definitely worth it. Sounds great so far.
Also, I would try some gating in there on synths, drums or both. Make a little more space in the sound.
Impressive stuff tho Harry.
